Group feedback on main pitch

The feedback we received on our pitch was quite positive, however we also recognise that our idea needs a lot of development.

Positives:

We were told that our general storyline was very interesting and has the potential to create lots of tension between the characters. The use of this scene being in a lift further creates tension as it makes the scene feel more claustrophobic.

We were also told that the use of subverting stereotypes, e.g the woman in fact killing the man also makes the story more interesting as it creates a plot twist in the narrative.

However:

We need to try and come up with a motive for the murder that will help set up the rest of the story to steer away from the possibility of the rest of the film turning into a drama because the emotions behind dramas usually have a lot of depth which may be hard to convey in this scene, and it would mean that we would have to rely quite heavily on the actors.

Our second point to consider is why should we favour the murderer? This scene does not go into depth too much about character, so how would we be able to make the audience empathise with the character in 3 minutes and take her side, because it is not often that we take the side of the murderer.